Chronicles of my feet first jumps into crazy situations.
Inside to be revealedMeandering, seekingAll across theGlobeIntelligent, yetNaive AlluringThere's nothingIt cannot create
OmniscientNovas, my imagination.
Prompted @ Acrostic Only
Must admire your imagination...It runs from being mellow, to being uninhibited, Staunch and Naive. Yeah, thats how we all are....not in black or white....but a shade of both; grey!Loved the poem! Absolutely!
Very good Miss Sunshine, made good reading.Yvonne.
Well done, you! Keep writing!!! Congrats again for completing 100 posts.
that was just about perfect.
Well written Miss Sunshine... I like the topic you chose :) Writers always have big imaginations =D
nice imagination i must say...:)n no, its not 'just my imagination'..it seems real enough...:)
You have a really nice imagination....enjoyed it.Keep writing and congrats on completion of your 100 posts!!
@Rajeev :Dthat's so true. We're all gray :D@YvonneThanks :D@AjeyWelcome and thankyou :)@Scarlet:) NOthing's perfect, but I am obliged :) and I love your name :)@Roshhahaha, it's a prompt :PBig Imaginatiom ;)@DestinyThat's the point..it's just a thin line btwn them :P@DreamerThanks :) and that was sweet :)
I especially like the beginning of this ... as a matter of fact it is wonderful, but the last line need a little tighten up. I have read other acrostics you have written and you are doing well. Thank you so much for joining us.
@Amias,Could you please guide me? :)I'd love to improve.. :Dand thank you so much :)
First of all remove the periods (.) and commas (,) from the end of each line. They are very distracting for such a good poem, and are not necessary. The reader will know where to end and begin.Line 6: remove the “in”Line 7: Try “Inside to be revealed”Line 11 & 12 is the same. “Immature” and “Naïve” has just about the same meaning. The imagination is as innocent as a child, but it’s also very intelligent, because no one gives you an imagination, it comes with you from the birth canal, a gift from the Creator. Try …“Intelligent, yetNaïve”Line 14 --- your imagination does not have to comprehend, it creates. It's up to others to comprehend what it creates. Try,“It cannot create”Line 15 & 16 - I know what you was trying to say --- that your imagination doesn’t pay attention to others notions, but it does not seem to fit with the rest of the poem... .the imagination is a pure creative tools, it does not care about nothing but creating, and exploring its creations. The imaginations is like a God .. without it nothing is created. Try this and see what you think …“Omniscient Novas, my imagination”Imagination is the beginning of life, like a super nova … all things are possible in such a light; they say that is how life began, with a big bang! God's imagination!Now I am not telling you how to write your poem, I am just giving you some alternatives. I have not changed the meaning of your poem, I have just showed you how to used different words to get your message across. Like I said, it has the making of a very good acrostic … and you used fewer words to convey your meaning.Oh it feel so good to be back blogging! Thank you for allowing me to enjoy your poem.
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Really well presented and definitely deserving of a BWA..Keep up the good work..ur brilliant!
thanks TBO..but it wouldnt be possible without Amias :)THANKS SO MUCH AMIAS! YOU ROCK! :D
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