Monday, June 1, 2009

Undefined






I have broken the barriers,
My world's now seamless,
My universe, more explorable.

The cavity has taken a new shape,
The gaps are now filled,
The oceans are bridged,
There ain't a single pebble,
Which is left unturned.

The flowers have a renewed fragrance,
My abode has a new address,
My sister's got a loved companion,
My neighbour's got a swanky car,
The garden's got sweet fruits,
The robin's got new chicks,
Everything's changed,
Everything's got a sharp definition.

But my soul,
Is still empty, Is still enchained, trapped,
It wanders, searching,
lonely and peturbed,
for something,
missing from it's heart probably,
which is still,
unrealistically undefined.





P.S. : The poem lacks the poetic flow, that I know, but it just came to me, and the overall effect was pretty sad, so it defined my purpose for the moment.

5 comments:

Meghaa said...

This poem may lack the poetic flow but everything turns to be beautiful when its from the heart... I hope your emptiness soon gets fullfilled.
Hope for the best and prepare for the worst... :)

Miss Sunshine said...

@ Meghaa
thank you for visitng, and yes, what you said is extremely true :)

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

actually, i liked it..may be because i associate myself with sad themes a lot.. and i hope that your emptiness soon vanishes

Brosreview said...

I reckon, among the poems I've read so far, this one is by far your best work.

It is honest, it is intense, it breaks the rules of poetry, it has incorporated a "compare and contrast" analogy very well, it is slightly agonizing as well. Good job!

Keep them coming!!!

Miss Sunshine said...

@ Brosreview
is it? Thanks. And wow! U gave such a wunnerful detailed analysis. It feels so good! :D
and yep, i tried doing just that. :)
only u recognised..hehe
better late than never! thanks a ton!